72.A Perilous Encounter

Fun to see Harry go toe-to-toe with Voldemort for the first time. Glad he’s no match but held his own in his way.

Voldemort wanted to read his mind, but it was his wishful thinking now that his surprise attack had failed.

This bit reads oddly. Upon reread, it’s Voldemort’s wishful thinking? Odd turn of phrase there.

Deep down, he knew he was not yet a match for Voldemort as a mere fourth-year student and that extra four years of training were not enough to become the Dark Lord’s equal, but experiencing the difference was like a cold punch to the gut. His fingers clenched together, tightening into fists as his gaze was fixed on the gate, where the Dark Lord had disappeared. Not enough. It wasn’t enough, but the Dark Lord no longer seemed like a distant goal, and he was now worthy enough to be taken seriously by Voldemort at first glance, resisted his mental assault, and that meant something.

Harry’s internal monologue is a bit jumbled. Makes sense for him to take victory where he can, but going from “a cold punch to the gut” to “the Dark Lord no longer seemed like a distant goal” in the same paragraph is a bit quick. Would flow a bit better for Dumbledore or even Juno to offer such words of comfort to him. Harry’s just survived a battle and is understandably feeling a bit down on his skills. He can’t be the world’s most reasonable 14 year old every time something happens. Dumbledore fills that role easily, but Juno would have added depth if she’s the one to pull him out of the fog of war.

Speaking of Juno, interesting character development. She’s growing in recklessness and Grindewald’s dressing down will be well-earned when he hears about it.

Excited as always for the next update.